Please correct my essay!!! Thank you!!!!!!!

[Iris877]

A friend of yours has received some money and plans to use all of it either
• to go on vacation
• to buy a car
Your friend has asked you for advice. Compare your friend’s two choices and explain which one you think your friend should choose. Use specific reasons and details to support your choice.

The money plays an indispensable role in our lives. People can spend their money purchasing almost whatever their desire. An significant amount of money could be spend on buying a car or going on vacation. Personally, I believe that although both options have advantages, it would be better to spend this money on purchasing a new car because it would be more useful in the long run.

To start with, a car is something that is helpful and lasts longer than going on a vacation. People use their cars to move from one place to another. It is one of the most convenient means of transportation because it is always available when we need it. My brother, for instance, not only attend university classes but also has a job that assists him to pay his tuition fees. He needs at least an hour to go from his work at the university by car. If he had not a car then it would be impossible for him to do them both.

Another reason that should be mentioned is that cars play a vital role when the owner is a parent. More specifically, parents drop off their children at their schools and then they go to their work. This means that they do not waste their time by waiting for the bus or a taxi. To illustrate this, my 30 year-old aunt who has four children has to drive them all to their schools every morning and to pick them up after her work. Furthermore, two of her children go to a different school because they are younger than their brothers. Her car has definitely made her life easier and convenient as she does not need to consume a lot of time in order to drive her children at their schools and go to her work.

On the other hand, spending this money on going a vacation would be a wise decision for people who prefer to enjoy their lives. Taking a break from our daily routine helps us release our anxiety and feel better. For example, my best friend received an amount of money for her birthday from her parents. She decided immediately to spend this money on a vacation because she always wanted to visit Italy. When she came back, she told us how happy she was and that it was worthwhile doing this trip.

In final consideration, I think that the advantages of owing a car outweigh the advantages of going on a vacation. A car is more permanent and it may be very useful for people who need to use a means of transportation daily. That is why, if I were my friend, I would purchase a car.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a professor and a departmental secretary

[Justin_Huang]

[Iris877]

Hi Justin! I appreciate your help!
I think it is "spend on a car" or "spend buying a car". So you're right.

Thank you!!!

[Ely2]

Toefl essay: Advertising influences people behavior positively and negatively!

Advertising influences both positively and negatively.

There are many effects of advertising,both positive and negative. Starting with positive effects,advertising show up newproducts for companies.Also through advertising,consumers can choose different interest rats for their different insurances.

A company can have new products for consumers and it's through advertising they can show them to the general public(potential consumers). It's through this advertisiment that consumers identify the new product's characteristics,fonction,use and utility.To bring this foward,someone may have a gas stvo with burner,but needs one with ceramic plate because it's more convenient for him and permits him to be more rapid while cooking.It's through advertisment he can quickly see one and have it.This therefore increases the consumers choice.

Secondly,consumers through advertisment can determine which insurance will be best for him, and at which rate because he has a variety of choice.If no advertisment is done,these different rates would not be known by the consumer before he goes to the company himself.To illustrate this,someone may need a medical insurance,house insurance...,before he goes to the different companies advertised,he already has an idea of the different rates they propose.

On the other hand,we have negative effects of advertisment; we experience nowadayschanges in behaviours,due to advertisment.Let it be on tv,radio stations,advertisment pannel,computer, all these changes affects our behaviors.

Firstly,we have the desire for a product we've seen a friend using which may lead to envy.Someone using a a product which she saw in an advertisment,may be envied by her friend who wants thesame product even if she can't afford it.This may lead her to stealing,traffic or even prostitution because she needs money to afford it.

Also a child ca be infront of a tv set, computer or advertisment pannel, and sees and action or scene and later wants to reproduce it.This can be physicaly harmful to him or create a psychological injury.Concerning children,adults can never be sure of preventing them from seeing or doing this they have witness.All we can do is to educate them.

Advertising can be thriving to the economy,and can also be indecent to people because it's a phenomenon that ca't be easily controlled.It is throuh it that most companies make their profits.

[Ely2]

Hi,
please correct my essay.thx
eliane