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People attend college or university for many different reasons (For examples: new experience, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and example to support your answer.
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Why do people attend college or university? Different people have different answers. In my opinion, there are three most important reasons: gain new experience, prepare for career and increased knowledge.

Firstly, it is a great opportunity to gain new experience because in college or university, you will meet many friends, who will teach you stay alive and how to behave with other. At there, you will also meet more people who have similar interests with you. Moreover, you can realize hidden ability such as play guitar, cooking, etc.

Secondly, attending college or university will help you to prepare for career in the future. Through presentation lessons and group working, you will obtain valuable experience and being more confident. You also learn how to use your time such as when to wake up, when is the sport-time, when is the study-time. Both of them are very important when you want to work in corporation, company.

Furthermore, the most important reason is increasing your knowledge. Of course, you can say that you can teach yourself or learning from your life but university is the shortest way to increase your knowledge. In university, you will learn everything you need, from history, culture, geography, literature to math, physical, technology, electric, etc. It is endless knowledge source for everyone who wants to study limited speciality or learning various subjects. If you have full knowledge in brain, find a good job is not difficult.

To sum up, don’t lose the chance of lifetime to change your life. After attending college or university, you will realize that it is exactly the best choice in your life.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between an upperclassman and a freshman coed

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no essayist should repeat the question in his essay.
please, make sure you wrote right topic sentence.

[Anhtu91]

my essay seems to have too much mistake. however, thank you very much