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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? What can we do to help the poor?

Of one billion people are living in conditions of extreme poverty conditions and almost 30 per cent of them are youth. As we know, young people are the most vulnerable to the effect of hunger and poverty. Consequently, world poverty opens the door in order to be exterminated people. That’s why, it is the most essential problem in the world. This essay includes some of the causes of world poverty, also, some solutions of this matter.

There are several reasons of the world poverty. One of the principal causes is lack of education. Great number of poverty-stricken people are illiterate people. In the plenty of countries there is neither elementary school nor secondary school. As a result, illiteracy makes lots of the poor.
Nowadays, most of international programmes, as a charity, also, governmental sponsorship is acting for improving education system; in addition to solve this problem.

The second significant problem is weak economics. As usual, weak economics is created by crisis or non-professional authorities of government. For “healing” this system, such kind of governments need to improve diplomatic relationship with developed countries, precisely, improving international affairs. Rebuilding educational system or illiteracy depends on the response of the second problem, as well.

Not only illiteracy or weak economics can make poverty, also, lack of innovation in technology. Government begins to go down, decause of innovation’s insufficient in technology. In order to avert this process, countries need to bring foreign specialists, besides, several times countries have to make extra funds. Generally, all problems are very serious and they are like chains.

We must acknowledge that there are many causes and many preventions of every problem. In most positions people don’t search denoument of the global problem or if they know how to solve it, people don’t do. Nevertheless, world poverty is the most essential and very earnest. With this reason, we should be sincere and very serious about poverty.



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