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[Dipal]

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Hello all,
This is my first try. I completed this essay in 30 minutes. Please give your suggestions.
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People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People take their basic knowledge from their school. University is the place where they can enhance the knowledge and make their bright future with experience gained. People also can learn the became a good citizen to the society.

Firstly, when people go to the University, they study particular subjest in depth. For example, a student studied various science subjects like Physics, Chemisrty and Biology from the school. When he goes to Medical College, he will have advance knowledge in Biology aspecially in Human Anatomy. He can enhance his knowledge in chemistry by understanding the chemical reaction between various molecules and how do they affect the human body.

Second is the experience, a computer engineer will get experience by getting practical knowledge from computer lab. The professors from their knowledge and experience help a student during his professional education. This experience is helpful to get better carrer opertunity in the specific field. Thats why many companies come to the university to choose their future candidate and this way people get respected jobs after completing their gradualtion from the University.

Last but not least, People learn good behavior, punctuality, honesty from the college. This helps people get honored position in the society. This helps making strong society with very high moral and ethics. Thus University / College help people getting advance knowledge and experience in the specific filed, better career as well as high ethics for life and society

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a university student and an employee in the university registrar's office

[RajToefl]

Looks good. Except in your second paragraph, your example seems to com efirst before some explination.

"Second is the experience, a computer engineer will get experience by getting practical knowledge from computer lab. The professors from their knowledge and experience help a student during his professional education. This experience is helpful to get better carrer opertunity in the specific field. Thats why many companies come to the university to choose their future candidate and this way people get respected jobs after completing their gradualtion from the University"

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