 #1 (permalink) Sun Nov 20, 2011 4:51 am Please review my essay. Thanks a lot!! |
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Could you please correct my essay. Thanks a lot! :-)
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agree or disagree: people should insist on the challenging dreams rather than realistic dreams.
I have always preferred pursuing my ambitious dreams, no matter who would say “that’s unrealistic…”
Firstly, there’s a saying “Fortune favors the bold”, which means triumphs belong to those who possess “big” dreams and persist in it, in spite of all the harassment and naysayers. We can name abundant big names who actually are “big” dreamers, but nothing has been achieved by those “realists” who settling themselves way below their potential because of what someone would think or say. While attending in Yale University, Frederick Wallace Smith wrote a research paper for his economics class, outlining the need for reliable overnight delivery service in a computer information age. His professor told him the idea is impossible and that in order for him to get a C grade, the idea had to be realistic. The paper turned out to be C . However, the dream remained with Frederick. It became the idea of FedEx Express, which has become head and shoulder today in the express delivery industry.
Secondly, only with a dream beyond our borders can we perfectly exploit our potential. The reason is simple--“Aim for the stars, even if you don’t achieve it you will have the satisfaction that you have at least touched the sky.” Our extent of potential will invariably remain a mystery unless we explore it, by pursuing a challenging dream, even an insurmountable one. Chasing ambitious targets motivates us to stretch ourselves and stretching has helped us achieve more than what we could have achieved, had we bend to reality. And in this highly competitive world, more achievements in less time keep us ahead of race. This also explains why I set up my goal to win a prize in the national maths' Olympics in my second high school year, when others doubted whether I could even pass my terminal exam in maths. Somehow, I failed to get a prize in that competition, but my maths turned out to score the highest among all the other subjects in my university entrance exam, which I could never imagine, for maths had always been my nightmare since school age.
What’s more, in most cases realistic is just a self-imposed limitation adopted from society. It is human psychology to play safe. People have no idea what their achievable goal would be. Hence every time they set a goal it is bound to be something less than what they can actually achieve, so that they do not miss it and will be encouraged to run after their next goal. However, realistic dreams would virtually be unrealistic, when he/she has a tendency to play safe and turn out to achieve nothing. What we should do is to take off the limits and go after our dreams, since “Avoiding danger is no safer in the long run than outright exposure. “as Helen keller said, “life is either a daring adventure or nothing.”
In conclusion, to be head and shoulders, we should chase our dreams like it’s the last bus of the night.
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