dialog

[Dvn44]

hi,

Are these sentences correct, please?

-Excuse me Madam, may I ask you a question? Would you like to tell me where the railway station is, please?
-Of course Sir, anyway I must be there, you see! I should even be there at the moment for I am taking a train in half an hour.
-So I'll come with you if you don't mind.
-Nice, do you leave too? I suppose you won't go far since you are travelling without luggage!
-No,no I won't. I'll only go and get an old friend coming from USA this evening.
-This evening, you said! But it's just 8 a.m.! You needn't to hurry!

Thank you.

[Beeesneees]

Generally it sounds very formal - too formal for a native English speaking country.

Aside from the formality, these parts need some recasting:

anyway I must be there, you see! - anyway, I also have to be at the railway station.
I should even be there at the moment - leave out 'even'.
-So I'll come with you if you don't mind. - Don't start with 'so'. If you wish to keep the formal tone, I suggest: Would it be acceptable if I came with you?
-Nice, do you leave too? You need to change this part entirely. I suggest: "That would be fine. Are you catching a train too?
- I suppose you won't go far since you are travelling without luggage! - I suppose you are not going far...
-No,no I won't. I'll only go and get an old friend coming from USA this evening. - I'm only going to meet an old friend who is coming from the USA this evening.
-This evening, you said! But it's just 8 a.m.! You needn't to hurry! - You needn't hurry. (no 'to')
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