 #1 (permalink) Thu Nov 24, 2011 22:32 pm Please correct my essay |
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Many people believe that it is very important to make large amounts of money, while others are satisfied to earn comfortable living.
In our daily life money plays a great role. For doing most daily activities we need some amount of money. Eating, going anywhere, studying, buying something and etc. require enough money. So, people need to earn money to build comfortable life conditions for themselves. On the other hand, some people tend earn large amounts of money, besides their comfortable living. I don’t agree with this statement because of the following reasons.
First of all, I would like to emphasize that money is serving us to create good life conditions in our life. I believe that earning enough money is very important. Without money we cannot live comfortably. There are many families that are divorced because of lack of money. If a family cannot acquire some amount of money, there will be many problems and the result of these problems is divorcing. Therefore, people should be sure that they have a stable income, then they should think about the building a family. As you see, money is playing crucial role in the beginning of a family and accompanies this role in the future of the family.
Moreover, I would like to underline that money is important for getting good education and creating a carrier. Studying in a famous university requires much money. Besides, beginning of your own carrier is requires such amount of money, also. So, people tend to have a big amount of money in every period of their life. Someone who has money and a logically improved brain he/she can acquire what he/she aimed for his/her future. By using the money in their hands people can increase the amount twice. Thus, money is very important in our life.
On the other hand, many people have a good living condition and everything for the happiness of a family, tend to earn large amount of money. I believe that they are wrong, because very large amount of money can bring unhappiness and misfortune with it. People who have enough money should continue their happy living without the idea of earning greater amount of money. It is the best way of enjoying the life.
In conclusion, I would like to state that money means many things, but it doesn’t mean everything. Many families are very happy without big amount of money. We should try to earn enough amount of money, not tremendous amount of money which we will think where we should spend or invest this money with anxiety all day. This anxiety can influence people badly.
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