can i post some of my essays?

[Jerrylovelyjerry]

i try to practice my essay writing but i don't know if it is right or need any improvement? Can you guys help me?

TOEFL listening lectures: A university lecture on Animal Behavior by a professor of Biology

[Katty2010]

Post your essay and we shall see.
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[Jerrylovelyjerry]

To get a good job or at least make a good impression in your job interview, you need to be confident and most importantly, to have a perfect academic achievement. The fact shows that most workplaces require high degree or good performance at school or university because somehow, it proves partly a person’s ability and intelligence. However, in some cases human brainpower is not only measured by mark and grade gained in class.
As mentioned above, school performance plays a crucial role. It not only shows the recruiter your adaptiblity in many different subjects but also your gift in a certain major through your mark such as GPA, SAT, MBA etc. There is an undeniable reason that the education system becomes more complete in appraising student’s ability. For instance, pupil is now allowed to learn many different subjects and simultaneously develop other necessary social skills including teamwork, presentation which gives a great contribution in preparing for his future job.
So what is its bad side? To answer this question, let take the look at 10 most richest people in the entire world. Surprisingly, all 10 of them are drop-outs. The point is that no measure can be applied in these cases. When being asked, all these 10 billionaires said that they had learnt more in the university of life than in former one. In fact, some researches state that an old traditional education is gradually killing the creativeness in students and force them to follow the exactly same way. These richest are really brilliant and they don’t need any school performace to demonstrate that.
The second shortcoming of evaluating a student’s ability through study is that it mostly bases on tests and examinations. Some people have to deal with intense nerve, especially in the most important moment like having a mid-term or last-term test. Finally, they end up getting lower result than their true ability and right now, there is no other way to examine students’ knowledge except for paper test. Even if rarely happening, it also contributes to the opposite of the statement.
In the long run, academic achievement is still a fundamental base on which a person is judged by society and no alternative is widely accepted, but it’s not totally a true measure to estimate a person- his true talent, personality or ability. Some which have great report cards and achievements but always have their noses in the books without any communication skill are only bookworms.

[Katty2010]

To get a good job or at least make a good impression in your job interview, you need to be confident and most importantly, to have a perfect academic achievement. The fact shows that most workplaces require high degreeS or good performance at school or university because somehow, it proves partly a person’s ability and intelligence. However, in some cases human brainpower is not only measured by markS and gradeS gained in class.

As mentioned above, school performance plays a crucial role. It not only shows the recruiter your adaptiblity in many different subjects but also your gift in a certain major through your SCORES IN EXAMS such as GPA, SAT, MBA etc. There is an undeniable reason that the education system becomes more complete in appraising student’s ability. For instance, pupil is now allowed to learn many different subjects and simultaneously develop other necessary social skills including teamwork, presentation which gives a great contribution in preparing for his future job.

So what is its bad side? To answer this question, letS take the look at 10 most richest people in the entire world. Surprisingly, all 10 of them are drop-outs. The point is that no measure can be applied in these cases. When being asked, all these 10 billionaires said that they had learnt more in the university of life than in former one. In fact, some researches state that an old traditional education is gradually killing the creativeness in students and force them to follow the exactly same way. These richest are really brilliant and they don’t need any school performace to demonstrate that.

The second shortcoming of evaluating a student’s ability through study is that it mostly bases on tests and examinations. Some people have to deal with intense nerve, especially in the most important moment like having a mid-term or last-term test.

Finally, they end up getting lower result than their true ability and right now, there is no other way to examine students’ knowledge except for paper test. (HOW ABOUT IBT?) Even if rarely happening, it also contributes to the opposite of the statement.

In the long run, academic achievement is still a fundamental base on which a person is judged by society and no alternative is widely accepted, but it’s not totally a true measure to estimate a person- his true talent, personality or ability. PEOPLE WHO have great report cards and achievements but always have their noses in the books without any communication skill are only bookworms.

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Pretty Impressive!
But you sure like making silly mistakes. Try to avoid them and you will get good grades.
8/10
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Just a confused kid... trying to live through twists & turns of life!
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Everything Is Temporary!

[Jerrylovelyjerry]

thank you so so much!! But why "lets"? I not really understand

[Beeesneees]

let's = let us. That is what Katty meant.
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Cheers m' dears!

[Jerrylovelyjerry]

thank you.....