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[Usharao]

Pets should be treated as family friends

Pets are the animals which are raised by the people, we can see a lot of pets walking on the road every morning or the evening. In my view pets should be treated the family members because of few reasons they are as explained below.

First, pets are most likely animals which are human friendly .Some of them are dogs, cats, rats, and rabbits. Usually when a pet is grown in our house we start feeding it and serving water to it we start playing with it while we are doing all these we will get a lot of relaxation which we are usually offered by our family members.

Second, pets show a lot of affection to us. For instance, in my childhood their used to be dog called jimmy in my neighbor’s house. I and my sister used to play with the dog daily. One day my sister was kidnapped by one of the well known person of our two families. Jimmy caught him after and we got back my sister. So, when a dog is doing all the family work and also giving the love to a family then it is certainly a part of family.

In Conclusion, as a pet gives us love, faith fullness, hope when we are alone then it is certainly called as a family member of us .So ,I definitely say a pet should be treated as a family friend.

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TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture by a professor of Sociobiology

[Katty2010]

Pets are the animals which are raised by the people, we can see a lot of pets walking on the road every morning or the evening. In my view pets should be treated LIKE family members because of few reasons they are as explained below.

FirstLY, pets are most likely animals which are human friendly .Some of them are dogs, cats, rats, and rabbits. Usually when a pet is grown in our house we start feeding it and serving water to it we start playing with it while we are doing all these we will get a lot of relaxation which we are usually offered by our family members.

SecondLY, pets show a lot of affection to us. For instance, in my childhood their used to be dog called jimmy in my neighbor’s house. MY sister AND I used to play with the dog daily. One day my sister was kidnapped by one of the well known person of our two families. Jimmy caught him after and we got back my sister. So, when a dog is doing all the family work and also giving the love to a family then it is certainly a part of family.

In Conclusion, as a pet gives us love, faith fullness, hope when we are alone then it certainly SHOULD BE called as a family member of us .So ,I definitely say a pet should be treated as a family friend.

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