Toefl®:Parents are the best teachers.Please review my essay!!

[Thaiham95]

Parents are the best teachers. Agree or disagree?

Since the first time we burst into tears, for most people, parents have played an essential role in our life. They teach us how to walk, they teach us how to talk, and they are also the first one to establish our foremost knowledge about the world. However, in my opinion, parents are not the best teachers. Why? Let examine several reasons below.

On the first hand, one person cannot live with his or her parents for the entire life. Commonly, people tend to leave their mom and dad after graduating from high school or university. For example, US teenagers, as soon as 18 years old, mostly want to learn how to live on their own and prefer not to stay with their families. They strive to make a living, confront many challenges, form relationships with other people and have their own family with children, wives, husbands. Thus, it is obvious that we are unable to spend all our lifetime with parents. Meanwhile, everybody always have to keep their experiences and knowledge up-to-date day by day. In general, parents cannot be considered the best teachers.

On the other hand, knowledge is something cannot be measured by any number, which is endless. In addition, our parents understanding are also limited, as same as other people. Therefore, the eagerness, the need of discovering the world cannot be fulfilled only by our mother and father. Moreover, in the process of studying, working, playing, we can create many social relationships. Through friends, teachers, partners, clients and so on, the opportunities to learn new things are increased. As a result, our knowledge is also developed. Thus, we can figure out that most of our understanding comes from school, acquaintances, society and even from ourselves.

In conclusion, we cannot deny the importance, the early understanding that parents have brought to our lives. However, due to the short period spending with parents and the vast of knowledge, I think that parents may be not the best teachers.

Thanks for reviewing my essay.

TOEFL listening discussions: A conversation between a dorm mother and a resident

[Luschen]

Hi, I think this is a very good essay - please see my comments below.

[Thaiham95]

Thank you!!!

[Olkozian]

One more essay. Thanks for considering.

Families play an important part in any society. Everything starts in a family: education, patriotism, responsibility, egotism, ethics etc. Everybody learns throughout the whole of their lives: at school or university, in society etc. But parents are the best teachers, because they educate their children physically, culturally and about work at the same time.

Firstly, parents give their children physical education. They accustom their children to cleanliness. For example: They wash them everyday, neatly put their things in order in the wardrobes, clean shoes and dresses. Many children do gymnastics in the morning, go in for sport, play in moving games with parents. Parents also teach their children to establish and achieve goals in their lives. The raising of children, teaches them to plan their time through work and rest alteration. Mostly, parents teach their children by showing them good examples to repeat. For instance, Mother shows them how to cook, lay the table, while Father shows how men work at home. Both teach brevity, generosity and self-control. Thus, parents educate their children physically & mentally.

Secondly, parents educate children culturally. When a child is small, parents teach them by speaking new words, telling stories and fairy-tales. Later, parents teach children to read and write, and to respect the work of others. When parents communicate with grandparents, children learn to respect others, help each other, and give place to elders. Children usually like to learn from adults, so they quickly learn everything shown to them. Children go to lessons, circus and theatres. This develops them culturally. Parents teach etiquette rules, particularly not to interrupt in discussions, politely ask questions, and allow a friend to pass first through the door. Children are mirrors of their parents. They copy gestures, manners, and the habits of their parents. By showing reaction of parents to deeds, they teach children to appreciate good manners in others. Thus parents are also cultural teachers.

Thirdly, parents develop a habit to work in their children. After dinner, parents ask children to wash dishes or floors. Once a week or more often, children make their own rooms. Family members speak about their work at home. After meals or play, children start to work without having to be reminded. They put toys back in order when the game is finished, and remember to water the flowers regularly. So then, a habit to work is induced.

Briefly, parents’ examples encourage culture, work and physical education. In giving good advice, parents prepare their children to face the real world. Good citizens improve the world they live in. Therefore, life for everyone improves.

A nicely put-together essay, with excellent sentence structure. A little more improvement and increase in vocabulary, and you are there!

[Luschen]

Olkozian, it is best to put your essay in its own topic so more people will see it.