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[Edward_Rolandohmygod]

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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.

The improvement of technology nowadays, especially the Internet, has changed the way of communication between people remarkably.This leads to relationships in society being influenced strongly in several things such as method and speed of interaction. However, this development can cause some serious problems.

There is no doubt that the Internet today makes everything more convenient in comparison with the past, including social connection. First of all, we do not have to write a substantial number of words on papers anymore. Instead of that, all of our work is pressing the buttons on the computer keyboard, so it saves our time and energy. Moreover, about 20 years ago, people spent much time running to the post office and buying stamps, whereas technology users nowadays do not have to go anywhere to send letters because of E-mail. Secondly, when sending your mails through the post office like in the past, the arrival time to the receiver is at least 3 days while it takes one second to transfer people’s word with the help from technology. That is why very few citizens today choose the traditional way.

Though it is true that technology supports our relationships a lot, we should bear in mind that the modern equipment takes many things out of us. Communicating skill is a good example for this because the Internet reduces the amount of face-to-face conversations and people do not have many chances to talk directly to each other. As a result, people will lose the ability to interact socially. Furthermore, when making friends on the Internet, it will create the opportunity for some bad users to lie about their lives or fake nicknameS and we cannot verify the speech of strangers. Consequently, people will easily face some unpredictable dangers in lives.

To conclude, in my opinion, the improvement of technology is one of the important parts in our lives and in social communication as well. Nevertheless, the Internet may bring us some negative effects that we are not able to foresee. Therefore, we should not depend on it excessively.

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[Mofan522]

first of all , i am not english teacher. --- just want to give you some friendly advice.

The improvement of technology nowadays, especially the Internet, has changed the way of communication between people remarkably.This leads to relationships in society being influenced strongly in several things such as method and speed of interaction(its influence show more strongly in modifying our social relationship, especially for its high speed and its efficient method). However, this development can cause some serious problems.

(in comparison with the past),There is no doubt that the Internet today makes everything more convenient in comparison with the past, including social connection. First of all, we do not have to write a substantial number of words on papers anymore. Instead of that, all of our work is pressing the buttons on the computer keyboard,(pressing -- typing : all of our work is done in typing the keyboard ) so (as that result ) it saves our time and energy. Moreover, about 20 years ago, people spent much time running to the post office and buying stamps, whereas technology users nowadays do not have to go anywhere to send letters because of E-mail.(whereas technology users, nowadays, do not have to waste this time, instead, they send the e-mail with a click) Secondly( it's confusing to use secondly ,here) , when sending your mails through the post office like in the past, the arrival time to the receiver is at least 3 days while it takes one second to transfer people’s word with the help from technology. That is why very few citizens today choose the traditional way.(i can hardly find the inconvenient from this paragraph to support you main point that:the development can cause problems)

Though it is true that technology supports our relationships a lot, we should bear( is 'suffer' better ?) in mind that the modern equipment takes many things out of us. (that the modern equipment deprive us of numerous valuable feelings ) Communicating skill is a good example for this because the Internet reduces the amount (the frequency) of face-to-face conversations and people do not have many chances to talk directly to each other(to have real contact). As a result, people will(risk losing the ability of social interact) lose the ability to interact socially. Furthermore, when(when is useless ) making friends on the Internet, it(i suggest you to use : making friends on the internet will ) will create the opportunity (opportunity is use to describe a good chance: will augment the number of the negative effects : such as lying and fake name. these car hardly verify in the fictional space) for some bad users to lie about their lives or fake nicknameS and we cannot verify the speech of strangers. Consequently, people will easily face some unpredictable dangers in lives.

To conclude, in my opinion, the improvement of technology is one of the important parts in our lives and in social communication as well( the improvement of technology is not only an important parts in our lives , but also a very useful instrument of our social communication ). Nevertheless, the Internet may bring us some negative effects that we are not able to foresee. Therefore, we should not depend on it excessively.(we should be prudent to avoid the abuse )