Please check my TOEFL® essay please! Thank you!

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*Nowadays, with the invention of the microwave and with the popularity of fast food restaurants, food has become easier to prepare than ever. Do you think microwave ovens and fast food restaurants are beneficial to society? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Technology is developing everyday and it make our life easier. For instance, microwave ovens become easier to preparing foods. Also fast food restaurant is good for working people. Therefore people do not spend lots of time for eating. However microwave ovens and fast foods can cause some dangerous illness.

First of all, nowadays, time is very valuable thing for people. People do not want to spend lots of time for something such as eating. Millions of people are working in cities and time is more valuable thing for them, in fact 1 second is valuable. For these reason people do not want to spend their time to eating. Therefore people prefer to eat fast food. Because they can save their time with fast food. Also some people live alone or their parents or mate are working and they come their home lately. When people come back to home from working, they are usually hungry or they want to eat something. Like this time, they can use their microwave ovens and they can cook fast foods. It ıs bıg ease for working or busy people.

In contrast, fast foods and microwave ovens can cause some illness such as cancer. It is well known thing that microwave ovens are emitting to radiation. I agree that it can ease our life but it is risky. However people continue to use microwave ovens. Besides fast foods can cause obesity. In the United States, lots of people battle with obesity. These people want to get rid of their extra weight but it is not probable. Because fast foods damage people's body and it cause addiction. Actually, microwave ovens and fast foods have lot of disadvantages.

To sum up, people's health’s are the most significant. People can't work and live without health. In my opinion, people should avoid from fast foods and microwave ovens. I agree that working people need more time but microwave ovens and fast food can cause health problem. I think microwave ovens and fast foods are not beneficial for people and its cause lot of health problem.

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Hi, your writing is quite good, but you need to recognize the difference between a persuasive essay prompt (like this one) and a compare and contrast essay prompt. With this type of essay, you are only supposed to present one side of the argument, the side you agree with. You can very briefly mention the other side in your introduction, but put the rest of your focus on supporting your side of the argument.