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[Tikofromgeorgia]

Some people prefer to play team sports while others prefer to play individual sports. Discuss the advantages of each. Then indicate which you prefer and why.

I have experience of being basketball team member and I also was national champion in chess. I think both - individual and team sports has its advantages and disadvantages but I prefer team sports.
Team sports like Football, Basketball etc. give person opportunity to share success with others. It is said by wise men that human being is social phenomenon, so he/she will not be happy in loneliness. Every person wants to share his/her happiness of bad mood with others. Due to this we marry or get a lot of friends and acquaintances. As I have mentioned in introduction, there was period in my life when I was in basketball team. Once our team has lost very important match. Actually, it was my fault, but surprisingly no one blamed only me. They said that whole team failed the match. I was really sad due to my mistake, but at the same moment very proud and happy, because all my team members were kind to me. They calmed me and we all repeated our motto:”All for one, one for all”. The second advantage of being team member is that you have to spend less energy. In the team roles are divided, so every member has its function and, in the whole, person spends less energy to become successful.
After those beautiful years, I decided to try myself in individual sport. I always liked chess and after some years of hard training I became national champion. Playing individual sports have its advantages too. It provides more chances to become well-known. To my point of view, it is easier to remember the name of one famous sportsman than each member in the team. Everyone knows the name of popular tennis player but less people know who is football second goal-keeper. Second advantage of individual sport is that you can earn more money then in team sport. To look through the statistics, the richest sportsman in the world is golf player Tiger Woods. In my opinion, if you are successful in tennis or golf, you have more chance to earn millions then in team sports.
In conclusion, although I have experience in both – individual and team sports, I prefer the later one, because, I think that when you are team member, the happiness you feel is stronger, because you share it with your friends and also being in a team requires less responsibility from you.

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[Luschen]

Hi, I am not an official TOEFL grader, but based on these critera: http://www.ets.org/Media/Tests/TOEFL/pdf/Writing_Rubrics.pdf I would score your essay a 3 out of 5

[Tikofromgeorgia]

Thank you so much. Your advice is very useful for me:)