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#2 (permalink) Fri Jan 27, 2012 10:29 am LCCI EfB, task 8 (letter: demanding compensation) |
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To The Manager Customer Relation Office Barret Airways
It's been a very awful day for me when i travelled in your Airway. I should say this because my arrival was delayed by an hour. I was suppose to be at the airport at 8 but unfortunately your Airway landed at 9. You might say many reasons for this delay but i couldn't take it lite. I feel regret for the suitation happened and i should surely say that you people are responsible for TIME MANAGEMENT. You failed to take the passengers on time.
I have missed the important Meeting with my clients which was suppose to happen on the stipulated time so that i had missed my new business. The reason for this is " Barrett Airways". You must have to comepensate for my TIME. Please respond to my mail asap else i would like to go legally through court. Hope you understand my feelings towards my business. What would you do if you were late to the meeting by one hour. You can't blame the workers but its your duty to keep keen on your TIME management.
Waiting for your TIMELY response to this mail.
Thanks & Regards,
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#3 (permalink) Fri Jan 27, 2012 11:28 am Re: LCCI EfB, task 8 (letter: demanding compensation) |
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Mario Rudolph 23 Freedom Avenue Pool PL2 3RX
27 January 2012
Barett Airways 123 Love Field Road London LN7 2HX
Dear Sirs and Madams
Firstly you should know that the Barett Airways company is my most often used airline. You might be interested to know that my last flight by your company made me really sad.
Please let me explain what happened. Last week took a regular flight from Pool to London. Unfortunately, the journey started with a delay. That was a pity but the one hour of lateness were still okay. That can happen. I booked a window seat, nothing specially, but my window seat was double booked and so I got an aisle seat. Okay, it was still from Pool to London you will think and you are right. The next problem was the arrival. The pilot had to fly one hour above London until he got the approval for landing. In summary I was more than 3 hours to late, I missed an important meeting and you double booked my window seat.
You want to keep me as your client? I think I have a right of refund! I except a payback not less than 50%. Otherwise it was my last time of using the Barett airline.
I am waiting for your quickly reply.
kind regards
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#4 (permalink) Fri Jan 27, 2012 11:41 am LCCI EfB, task 8 (letter: demanding compensation) |
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Gabriele Gagell 22 Yorkshire Street Leeds LE7 D34
26 January 2012
Barrett Airways 99 Green Road Hamshire HA6 R41
Dear Sir or Madam
Complain
A month ago I booked a ticket for a flight from Leeds to London, because there I would attend a important business conference on Thursday the 19 January at 1.15 p.m.. This Flight should start this day at 10.00 a.m. from our local airport in Leeds. You promised me that I will arrive London not later then 11.45 a.m.. That was enough time for me to go by a taxi and to be in time. Unfortunately the departure time was delayed by one hour and so I was late. Next problem for me was the too small site. It was very uncomfortable and the coffee I got was cold. I am very angry, because I payed a lot of money for this ticket. So I want to get back a part of my money or I think about change the airline. A long time I was a satisfied customer but this one was a disaster.
I look forward to your response
Your faithfully
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#5 (permalink) Fri Jan 27, 2012 11:45 am LCCI EfB, task 8 (letter: demanding compensation) |
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Katja Köhler Matrix Software Ltd 120 Penny Lane Liverpool L33 7SW
27 January 2012
Barrett Airways 150 Penny Lane Liverpool L33 7 SW
Dear Sir or Madam
Fly BE 602 20 January 2012
For many years I book my flights by Barrett Airways. To date I`am very satisfied with their service. A week ago I travelled from Liverpool to London. There I want attend an important conference.
Now I am not very happy that I missed the conference. The departure time was delayed by an hour and my reserved seat in the business class was occupied. On the return flight happened exactly the same. For the future, that should not happen again. I need a travel company that I can rely.
I plan to fly again in 3 weeks to London. With this instance I ask for a reparation. I hope you make a good offer for this flight. I expect your answer until the end of this week. You can call me by phone number …...
I look foward to good cooperation and to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely
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#6 (permalink) Fri Jan 27, 2012 16:30 pm LCCI EfB, task 8 (letter: demanding compensation) |
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Hi Gabi, great letter. Just a few problems with your verb tenses.
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Gabriele Gagell 22 Yorkshire Street Leeds LE7 D34
26 January 2012
Barrett Airways 99 Green Road Hamshire HA6 R41
Dear Sir or Madam
Complain {I would remove this}
A month ago I booked a ticket for a flight from Leeds to London, because there I would [to] attend a important business conference on Thursday the 19 January at 1.15 p.m.. This Flight {no caps} should [have] start[ed] this[that] day at 10.00 a.m. from our local airport in Leeds. You promised me that I will[would] arrive [in]London not later then[than] 11.45 a.m.. That was enough time for me to go by a taxi and to be in[on] time. Unfortunately the departure time was delayed by one hour and so I was late. [The] Next problem for me was the too small site[seat]. It was very uncomfortable and the coffee I got was cold. I am very angry, because I payed[paid] a lot of money for this ticket. So I want to get back a[be refunded] part of my money or I [may have to] think about change the[changing my] airline. [For] A long time I was[have been] a satisfied customer but this one[flight] was a disaster.
I look forward to your response
Your [Yours] faithfully
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#7 (permalink) Fri Jan 27, 2012 18:55 pm Re: LCCI EfB, task 8 (letter: demanding compensation) |
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| Mario From Saxony wrote: |
Mario Rudolph 23 Freedom Avenue Pool PL2 3RX
27 January 2012
Barett Airways 123 Love Field Road London LN7 2HX
Dear Sirs and Madams
Firstly you should know that the Barett Airways company is my most often used airline [the airline I use most often] or [my favorite airline] You might be interested to know that my last flight by[with] your company made me really sad.{"upset" may be a better word}
Please let me explain what happened. Last week [I] took a regular flight from Pool to London. Unfortunately, the journey started with a delay. That was a pity but the one hour of lateness were[delay was] still okay. {maybe add "I realize" here} That can happen. I booked a window seat, nothing specially, but my window seat was double booked and so I got an aisle seat. Okay, it was still from Pool to London you will think and you are right. The next problem was the arrival. The pilot had to fly one hour above London {would be more clear if you said "The pilot had to circle over London for an hour"} until he got the approval for landing. In summary I was more than 3 hours to late, I missed an important meeting and you double booked my window seat.
[Do] You want to keep me as your client? I think I have a right of[for a] refund! I except[will accept] a payback not less than 50%. Otherwise it[this] was my last time of using the Barett airline. {this last sentence is awkward - I would say "Otherwise, I will never use Barrett Airways again."}
I am waiting for your quickly reply.
kind regards [Kind regards]
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#8 (permalink) Fri Jan 27, 2012 19:04 pm LCCI EfB, task 8 (letter: demanding compensation) |
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| Katjakb wrote: |
Katja Köhler Matrix Software Ltd 120 Penny Lane Liverpool L33 7SW
27 January 2012
Barrett Airways 150 Penny Lane Liverpool L33 7 SW
{wow, you work very close to the airways headquarters - you could hand deliver the message ;) }
Dear Sir or Madam
Fly BE 602 20 January 2012 {I would include this information in the text of the letter}
For many years I [have] book[ed] my flights by[with] Barrett Airways. To date I`am[have been] {or more accurately: "Until recently, I had been"} very satisfied with their service. A week ago I travelled from Liverpool to London. There I want [, where I was to] attend an important conference.
Now I am not very happy that I missed the conference. The departure time was delayed by an hour and my reserved seat in the business class was occupied. On the return flight happened exactly the same [way]. For[In] the future, that[this] should not happen again. I need a travel company that I can rely [on].{some people are sticklers for not ending sentences with prepositions, for those people you would write "I need a travel company on which I can rely.}
I plan to fly again in 3 weeks to London. With this instance I ask for a reparation. I hope you make a good offer for this flight. {try to be more explicit in this part - maybe "Due my last experience, I expect you to recompense me with a large discount on this next flight."} I expect your answer until[by] the end of this week. You can call me by [at the] phone number …...
I look foward {sp} to good cooperation {ok, but I would say "I look forward to your cooperation on this matter"} and to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely
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#9 (permalink) Fri Jan 27, 2012 19:15 pm LCCI EfB, task 8 (letter: demanding compensation) |
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Wow, I would hate to make you late for a meeting! ;)
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To The Manager Customer Relation Office Barret Airways
{see other examples for proper business letter headings}
It's been[It was] a very awful day for me when i travelled in["on" or "via"] your Airway. I should say this because my arrival was delayed by an hour. I was suppose[d] to be[arrive] at the [destination] airport at 8 but unfortunately your Airway[my plane] landed at 9. You might say["have" or "state"] many reasons for this delay but i couldn't[can't] take it lite[lightly]. I feel regret {the airline should feel regret - you should feel anger} for the[that this] suitation happened and i should surely say that you people are responsible for TIME MANAGEMENT. You failed to take the passengers on time.
I have missed the important Meeting with my clients which was suppose[d ] to happen on[at] the stipulated time so that i[I ] had missed my new business. The reason for this is " Barrett Airways". You must have to comepensate [me] for my TIME. Please respond to my mail asap [or] else i would like[will have] to go legally through court{"through the legal system" sounds better}. [I ]Hope you understand my feelings towards my business. What would you do if you were late to the meeting by one hour.[? ] You can't blame the workers but[since] its your duty to keep keen on your TIME management.
Waiting for your TIMELY response to this mail.
Thanks & Regards,
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#10 (permalink) Fri Jan 27, 2012 21:41 pm LCCI EfB, task 8 (letter: demanding compensation) |
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Hi Luschen, thank you very much for all your corrections. Here is a suggested answer by LCCI:
KURT WEILL ASSOCIATES 6 KINGSBURY SQUARE LONDON SW15 4GY Suitable Date The Customer Relations Officer Barrett Airways 46 Upper Richmond Road Putney London SW12 6FK
Dear Sir I wish to register several complaints about my unfortunate experience last week when I flew to Dresden on your flight BRT515. Although no reason was announced, the flight departure was delayed by an hour. All passengers had boarded the plane and had to endure an hour waiting on the tarmac before permission to take off was received. During the flight I received very poor service indeed. First, I was not offered the usual upgrade from Business to First Class. I had ordered a vegetarian meal but was bluntly told by your cabin crew member that the caterers had not supplied this and that I would have to choose from the standard menu. I have not been treated so rudely aboard your flights before. I should also mention that there was total silence from the pilot during the flight. Normally passengers are informed about position and weather on arrival, but we heard not a single word until we landed.
I feel that some compensation is due and ask you to consider offering me a 50% discount on my next flight. Such a gesture might keep me flying with Barrett.
Yours faithfully A.
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#11 (permalink) Sun Jan 29, 2012 11:55 am LCCI EfB, task 8 (letter: demanding compensation) |
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| Luschen wrote: |
| I need a travel company that I can rely [on].{some people are sticklers for not ending sentences with prepositions, for those people you would write "I need a travel company on which I can rely.} |
Hi Luschen, are right, there might some people who say that ending sentences with prepositions is not good practice. However, you will read and hear a lot of sentences with that structure and this is perfectly acceptable and standard English. If you want some fun, you should read this: Churchill on ending sentences with prepositions
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