Check my essay please,i prepare the TOEFL® test for may,5 Thanks a lot

[Azoudiarra]

Topic: Drug abuse has became a major social problem in many parts of the world.Discuss the consequences of drug abuse and ways to deal with the problem.

Nowadays drug is taken by several people.The improvement of this phenomenon affect our society,specially young people.Consequently,many of them became too violent.This is reason why ,drug is considered as a major social problem in many part of the world.This problem is very serious and should be eradicate as soon as possible.

First,drug destroy young people future.Most of our young behavior is changed.They are not get a good education.This phenomenon affect the suburbanites ,those are very poor.this problem is a real threat for the society.Another danger is that,drug affect also children.Many of them are today crazy or get mental illness.Parents cannot put their child to school,because they prefer taking drug that go to school.In this way ,they are became addicted to it.Second,the improvement of violence and serious crime.Many neighbors are today in insecurity,during the night anyone cannot take risk to go out,because it 's is dangerous.To illustrate this point of view,certain people are frequently killed at night.Even though the presence of police the violence and crime are not stopped.However they are many way to eradicate this phenomenon.In my opinion the best ways is that,first to reinforce the drug traffic control.On the other words to intensify the control across the border.In conclusion,i would like that everybody,together fight to solve that terrible situation.

TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture from a life sciences class (3)

[Luschen]

Hi, please make sure to insert two spaces after each period. Make sure to divide your essay into paragraphs, with each paragraph covering a different argument. Your last paragraph was a little too short and you need a separate conclusion paragraph. Reading other students' essays on this forum will help your organization and structure.