 #2 (permalink) Mon Jan 30, 2012 3:32 am Re: Expired time |
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Hi, very nice essay. Your last body paragraph seemed a little weak to me. I am not sure exactly what your main point was in it. Your essay seemed quite long, maybe you could try to be more concise to give you time to finish your introduction.
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This time I was not able to finish my introduction in 30 minutes. However, I want to get used to the test conditions, so I am not changing this attempt.
Do you prefer to marry someone who is similar to you, or someone who is different from you?
Personally, I think that is better to marry someone who is different from you.
To begin with, you can have many more varied conversations. If you marry someone who has only the same interests as you, you end up talking every day about the same topics. Even if[though] this could be an early advantage in a relation[ship], providing a good feeling between two persons, I strongly believe that for a long relation[ship], as a marriage should be, this is quite harmful. If every day there are simply no new thing[s ] to talk about, boredom is a factor that could arise. This is the main reason why I woul[d ] not ever marry [n]or go out with a girl who studies or works in the same place as me.
In addition to the more varied conversations you can have, I think that you can broad[en] more your personal interests [by] marrying someone who has many different passions than you. You can be able to discover new aspects of the world that you were never been[before] aware of.{or "you had never been aware of"} For example, let's say I marry an American girl who loves basketball. Since in my country this game is not as famous as in the US, I have never been a fan of NBA, and I barely know the basic rules of basketball. Suddenly I find myself talking about the last{"latest" would be better} NBA matches, watching some games at the[on] TV {when you are talking about watching tv, don't use "a" or "the". When you are talking about an actual television set, use a or the. "A flower is on tv" means there is a show about a flower. "A flower is on the tv" means there is a flower on top of the television.} and so on. This could lead [to] the discover[y] of an [previously] unknown interest for my person. I am not saying that this is an automatic mechanism, but for sure it["it surely" is more formal] would not happen if I marry a girl with the same passions as me.
Finally, in combination with more interesting conversations and the knowledge of new things, having different interests and characters ["personalities" would be better here - character usually refers to your morals - you either have a good character or a bad character. Marrying someone with a bad character is always a bad idea.] can help a relationship to last longer. If you marry someone who is very similar to you, quite soon you could have not more[stop having] fun with him/her. Since you do have [exactly] the same passions, every day is equal to the previous one, and nothing very exciting can happen. Having different characters{see above - maybe "interests" would be good here}, however, can lead to some contrasts that, in my opinion, can benefit the relationship. It is through the overcome of[overcoming] difficulties that a relationship can last, so I think that such contrasts are necessary. On the other hand, with a partner who is very similar to you, you could have never[never have] an argument for years, but then, when the first one happens you do not have any experience to deal with it. Sometimes this can have extreme consequences for the relationship. {this last sentence doesn't seem to tie in with the rest of the paragraph}
In considering if it is better to marry someone who is similar to you or someone who is different from you, I explored issues such as the more varied conversations you can have; the possible discover of new interests and passions; and the possibility of strengthing the relationship with more frequent arguments.{this last point sounds unlikely to me} All these factors lead [me] to prefer the idea to marry[of marrying] someone who is different from me.
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