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[Krexma]

How should students be evaluated: accordingly to their achievements or their effort? Discuss.

Development of a common method which enables to evaluate students’ knowledge has been playing an increasingly important role in the education world. Some people have the opinion that achievements such as grades reflect students’ performance. Others, however, believe that students should be assessed accordingly to their attempts. Both sides of this argument will be analyzed before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.

First, system of grades is commonly used as a tool for evaluation achievements in all over the world. Even from school age children accustomed to be evaluated accordingly to marks because this form of assessment is easier and more objective. For example, students ‘projects and theoretical knowledge are graded by this system demand less time and forces. Moreover, grades achievements are easier transferable and acceptable in cases students want to change an institution. Furthermore, giving final marks after sum up points is more objective way of evaluation of student performance because it does not have personal impact. Therefore, the evaluation accordingly to students’ achievements would be preferable in many cases.

Second, some people argue that students should be assessed mainly by their efforts during studying. This approach is acceptable for some reasons such as lack of competition between students and giving opportunity for self express to students with less natural abilities but hard working. For example, the evaluation of group work presentation should take into consideration personal efforts that people make during the preparation, because it is difficult to assess correctly everyone during a group work.

To sum up, taking into consideration all the above mentioned reasons the student group work should be evaluated accordingly to personal contribution; however, the most popular way of performance assessment is according to students’ achievements because of wide use, easier way and lack of personal impact on it.

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[Luschen]

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[Krexma]

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