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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People should read only those that are about real events, real people, and established facts.
Use specific reasons and details to support your opinion.

There are many books which are not based on facts and there are also many people who like to read them. These books may improve creativity of people, but reading them is not good idea. Therefore, I think that people should read only those that are about real events, real people, and established facts. This is because there are many people who cannot come out from fictions and they think that fiction is real and try to act like it. And we can only learn from real people.

There are many people who cannot escape from events which are not real. There are many fiction books which are made from authors’ brain, which means that the events that are happening in fiction are not real events. For example, there were many criminal events which were copied from fiction books. They happened because suspects wanted to act like a main character in a fiction book and got confused between real events and fake events. Also, other genre in fiction such as fantasy makes people serious about man-maid events. They read book about magic, vampire, ghost or supernatural power and think that there are some unusual events happening. These examples are really happening and it is one of most dangerous syndromes.

Also, we cannot learn from who are not existing. We often learn many things from who were famous and successful during his/her life. However, this only happens if the person who we learn from actually existed. This is because people from fiction will only face the events which are made by people, but during our lifetime, we cannot choose any of events that are happening round ourselves. However, real people actually face real events and get through if there are obstacles while they walk during their life time. For example, the main character in fiction might have same problem that we have, but while he/she faces the problem it will be solved different way compare to real events.

In conclusion, people should only read about real events, real people, and established facts. This is because there might be problem if people read something is not real and we can only learn from real people. Fiction is what people eager, so background and event will be made by human not nature.

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[Luschen]

I think your organization is very good and your reasons are clear, but to me they are very unconvincing. I think your grammar and vocabulary are pretty good too. I think I am too biased about your subject for me to give an objective grade on the essay though. Maybe you could write another one on a different topic?

I hope I have not offended you - maybe I shouldn't have said any of this, so please don't let any of this discourage you from continuing to post your essays :)