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[Yolchuyev]

Some people trust their first impressions about a person’s character
because they believe these judgments are generally correct. Other people
do not judge a person’s character quickly because they believe first
impressions are often wrong. Compare these two attitudes. Which
attitude do you agree with? Support your choice with specific examples.
As people are very different their attitudes toward to each-other is also diverse. That some people believe their first impressions about people, while others think it is not good to judge people based on their appearances.
Firstly I think that first appearances of people sometimes is relative to their real
characters and in some cases it is really useful to judge people in that way. For example if we see a person who behaves very strange although he/she might be a normal person and just a stranger to that area it is better to tell the police about him/her. Because, if he/she is really an innocent person there wont be anything wrong with him/her, but if he/she is really a felon our society would be more safe and beautiful with less criminals.
On the other hand in most cases everything is not like that and treating people based on our first impressions is not true. Especially in social communities new comers sometimes shy and cannot show their real characters and abilities. For example, during the first month in our new school being far from home everybody was stranger and it was really hard to know people. After some time everybody started to show their real characters and then I understood that it is not good to judge people because of their first appearances. Because, some students who I do not have positive impressions, then become my best friends and now I am really sorry for my thoughts about those students.
Eventually, I think that sometimes it is true that people have same characters as their first appearances and it is good to treat them in that way. However, in most cases it is not fare to judge people based on our first impressions and we should give a chance to people to prove themselves and show their real faces.

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[Luschen]

Hi, I think you have done a great job with this essay. Your introduction sounded a bit abrupt but the rest of your structure was good. Please see my other comments below.

[Yolchuyev]

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