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[Edward_Rolandohmygod]

The diagram illustrates the environmental issues raised over the lifetime of a product. In general, the process contains a number of complex stages from planning and design to recycling.

Firstly, the product is planned and designed the shape and size by the company on the computer. After that, materials and resources of power are transported to the factory and used in order to complete the product. Before the product is distributed to the quick shop for sales, it must be packaged carefully. Next, customers have to come to the shop to buy the product, then bring to their homes and use it. After being consumpted by people, some parts of the product are eliminated, whereas others are recycled again to make the input for the next production. Finally, the customers who have used the goods give feedback to the company to express their opinions about it, so the following product can be innovated by the planners and designers and a new cycle begins.

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[Luschen]

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