Please~Should parents encourge their children do work independently?

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Rather than help their children do school work, parents should encourge their childen do work independently.Do you agree or disagress?

Essay
Nowadays, more and more parents realize the importance of their children's education. So they all want their children to get a good mark in school.However when it comes to the topic of school work, most people tend to believe it's better for parents to help their children do school work, while others consider that parents encourage their children to do work independently. Personally, I stand on the side of helping children to do their school work.

Helping children to do their work can save time for the children to do sports and other activities they love. As we all know there is increasing amount of school work for the child to do very day. When I was in primary school, it only takes me about 1 hour to finish my homework every day. However, my little sister who is in the primary school now has to use 2 or 3 hours to do that.When she finally finishes them, she has no time to do other things. But sports and hobbies are really important for the children. So I decided to help her. After this she can have 1 more hours to play outside and read the book she's really interested in.

At the same time, with the participation of parents, doing homework can be more interesting which can make students more motivated to study. A survey by Peking University this month found that nearly eighty percent student think doing homework is boring, the result of the survey also indicates that it maybe of no effect for children to do the homework they are not interested in. Therefore parents can give more examples or tell some stories related to the homework making the process more interesting. If the children will happy doing the work,they may like study and learn more knowledge.
Moreover, because there are some school works should to be done outdoor and contact with strangers, it may be dangerous for children to do such work alone. There are a lot of news reported about traffic accidents and kidnap cases about children. So if a child to do his school work such as collecting some insect sample or interviewing some person they don't know, they could be indanger. It's better for the parents to company their children doing such work. This also can make better relationship between parents and children.

Taking into account of all these factors, we can find out there are many advantages for parents to help children do their school work. Otherwise,children may feel boring or have dangers.

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