please check my essay.thank you

[Krexma]

What are the problems of a student who wishes to study in a foreign country? Discuss university admissions, passport, visa, language problems, etc

Nowadays many young people consider possibility of studying abroad because of the better opportunity for successful career. Additionally, admission for some profession is easier abroad than in original country. However, students should take into consideration all aspects of living and studying in foreign country before making such important decision as studying abroad.

First, the admission for foreign university is the process that required more time and money than studying in the original country. For instance, the admission requirements usually differ in the abroad university, therefore the first condition to be accepted for university: evaluation of education accordingly to local standards. Sometimes, students are requested to complete some courses before starting their major program. On the whole, students who wish to study abroad should have appropriate secondary education and good financial base.

Second, the most difficult aspect of education abroad is studying not in the native language. Sometimes, students are required to learn a new language from the beginning or to improve their level .For example, some people go to study medicine in Italy even without knowing a one word in Italian. Therefore, they will spend their first year only studying language. Moreover, the foreign students will always need to spend more efforts and time to memorize new information because it is not their native language.

Third, receiving education in a foreign country is a great challenge because students are far from their family and friends. For example, some students are not enough adult to manage their live alone without everyday help of their parents. In these cases, they could have many emotional and daily maintenance life problems such as planning budget, cooking and cleaning.

To sum up, studying abroad has bring a lot of benefits but created some problem as well. The foreign students should be psychological prepared to live without family and handle different types of problems as the admission to university, studying or improving foreign language. Therefore, studying abroad demands much recourse and should be carefully planed well in advance.

TOEFL listening discussions: Why does the student need money?

[Luschen]

Hi Krexma, very good writing. I enjoyed reading it - please see my suggestions below.

[Krexma]

recourse- it should be resources.
Do we need to put s after create,because i think :studying abroad can bring but create, is can connect also to create?
Thank you , I appreciate your help.

[Luschen]

Hi, resources is fine there. The can only goes with bring, not really with creates here unless you explicitly say "can bring but can create".

[Krexma]

I understand,
Thank you.

[Luschen]

I would say the rule is if you use and to connect the two verbs and they are fairly close together, you can leave off the second "can" - "studying abroad can bring benefits and create opportunities". If the conjunction is but or the verbs are separated by a long clause, it is better to use can in front of each verb.