 #2 (permalink) Sun Feb 12, 2012 10:19 am Re: A good sense of humor is one of the most important human qualities |
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Hi Scientist_A, I liked your essay :) I commented on few points but I don't have to remind you that I'm not a native English speaker nor an English teacher :D
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A good sense of humor is one of the most important human qualities.
There are many qualities {that} are important for {a} human {being}. I believe that one of these qualities is a sense of humor. This quality {repetition! Try to use synonyms like characteristic or trait} is very beneficial because it helps us to look the reality of life from {do you mean: to face the life challenges in an} optimistic way, keep ourselves younger {what do you mean by that?}. And {Capital}we can influence other people in a good way if we have this quality {This is more like an an explanation, don't elaborate in the introduction. You may say: Having a funny personality can positively influence other people}. I will explain my reasons with the following paragraphs {avoid saying so, I used to use it but my teacher told me not to :)}.
First of all, I would like to emphasize that a good sense of humor can make a person to accept the harsh realities of life {and deal with it more rationally}. As you know we confront with a lot of daily problems. Some of them we cannot solve easily and on time {Some of them cannot be solved easily and needs some time}. A person who has a sense of humor does not become nervous because of these problems. They {He} look{s at} the problems from different angle and they wish that they will {tries to} find the solution immediately. So endurance is very important for people and I advocate that people who have a sense of humor endure problems easily and do not suffer because of their nervous.
Furthermore, I would like to underline that a good sense of humor avoids the appearance of people becoming older. I mean that people who have a sense of humor are looking like {looks} younger than their peer{s}. And also it is proved that the spirits of these people stay younger. They wish {What do you mean by wish?} and act like youngsters. So it is very important for living happily in this world. Indeed, most of happy people have a great sense of humor.
To sum up, I would like to repeat the important role of a good sense of humor in our life. For living happily and enduring for problems this characteristic is irreplaceable. And happy people influence others and tend to share positive attitude {a humorous person lives happily and is successful at overcoming life's obstacles because of his positive attitude}. Thus, people who have a good sense of humor influence their community optimistically, too {It seems like a new idea, do not talk about a new idea in the conclusion ever :) and check for synonyms of "sense of humor", I used some in the essay :D}.
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 Mochad
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