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[Krexma]

The expression “Never, never give up” means to keep trying and
never stop working for your goals. Do you agree or disagree with this
statement? Use specific reasons and examples to support your
answer.

Knowledge how to reach goals in life is one of the important skills that people should have in order to succeed in their lives .Some people have personality which allow them to keep on to their targets even facing difficulties. However, other people give in easily. I strongly agree with the statement that encourage people never give up and try to advance to their goals because this approach ensure better outcomes, good mood and happiness.
First and foremost, people should develop ability to regain after experience of disappointments and to find forces to continue toward their goals.
For example, I wanted to immigrate to other country, and one of the conditions was providing my grandmother birth certificate. Unfortunately, I did not have it, but I was ready to try everything that could help me to reach my dream .So I started to ask help from relatives even from whom I had not ever seen before. Moreover, I went to different cities to met relatives hoping to prove family relationships. Nevertheless, I did not succeed to find the birth certificate I became familiar with my relatives. Finally, I used document from the old population census that was kindly accepted as equivalent .So, ability never give up and to find solution brought me to live in country that gave me new life.

Second, personally, when I facing difficulties it makes me stronger and brings me in good mood because I become confident. Additionally, when I fulfill my goals I am very happy. Therefore, desire to reach happiness force me continue and do not give in. I always say to myself that better regret about what I did than regret about things I did not do. For example, I am afraid of public speaking, however I was chosen to give a speech on a research conference. Though, I explain to my mentor that it would be difficult for me ,and I thought I would have destroyed reputation of my mentor if I had failed to speak properly, but I work hard on myself memorizing speech and became confident. Finally, I was ready to give lecture and I really was excited when people told me that it was amazing. Hence, if people do not give up they could be satisfied with their lives.

To sum up, I definitely agree with the expression: “Never, never give up”. It means work hard forward your goals even when you do not believe for the best outcome, and you could reach everything in your life and be happy.

TOEFL listening lectures: A lecture from an arts class

[Luschen]

Hi, I really enjoyed your essay. It was very convincing. Still a lot of missing articles though. And you seemed to have some problems with your verb tenses and infinitives. I would rate this essay a 3.5 out of 5.

[Krexma]

Thank you for your help.
I see I need to work hard on my writing and do not give up.