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kicked started #1 (permalink) Wed Nov 22, 2017 11:00 am   kicked started
 

Hi,
The two points I feel uncomfortable about, were taken from an article.
Here you go.
1) “Moses was just 11 when he arrived in England as an asylum seeker after both his mother and father were killed during religious clashes in Nigeria in 2002.
The 26-year-old was playing football in the streets when his parents lost their lives.”
2) “…but his performance kicked started a run of 22 Premier League appearances in a row…”

With 2) obviously a misprint, I would also question the way the author are dealing with Moses’ age in 1).
“Now 26, he was playing…” would be stylistically better for me.

I wonder if you agree.
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Re: kicked started #2 (permalink) Thu Nov 23, 2017 5:29 am   Re: kicked started
 

I have two questions and a suggestion:

1. Doesn't '2002' indicate that Moses was 11 when his parents were killed, and now he is 26? (No anachronism)
2. Could the second sentence imply that the 26-year-old was another son?

Suggestion: The 26-year-old was playing football in the streets WHERE his parents lost their lives.
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Re: kicked started #3 (permalink) Thu Nov 23, 2017 9:20 am   Re: kicked started
 

Anglophile wrote:

2. Could the second sentence imply that the 26-year-old was another son?


No, the family doesn’t have another son who is 26.

I was actually wondering about that part: “The 26-year-old was playing football … when his parents lost their lives.”—do you agree with the wording? (Sounds like the 26-year-old was doing sth when sth else happened in 2002.) Hence my question whether the phrase “The 26-year-old was playing football in the streets when…” is flawless or it can be misinterpreted.
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Re: kicked started #4 (permalink) Thu Nov 23, 2017 9:38 am   Re: kicked started
 

You could examine my suggestion wherein WHEN was changed into WHERE.
That's the only possibility I find in the absence of the original text with me.
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Re: kicked started #5 (permalink) Thu Nov 23, 2017 10:02 am   Re: kicked started
 

Anglophile wrote:
You could examine my suggestion wherein WHEN was changed into WHERE.

You can read it following the link: http://www.bbc.co.uk/sport/football/42060348

To me “The 26-year-old was playing football in the streets WHERE his parents lost their lives” would sound even murkier as it removes the time factor (when) altogether.
(The article was written by a Nigerian which prompted me to ask for a second opinion.)
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Re: kicked started #6 (permalink) Fri Nov 24, 2017 4:05 am   Re: kicked started
 

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“Now 26, he was playing…” would be stylistically better for me.

Yes, I agree.

I think 'The now 26-year-old Moses was playing ....' OR 'Moses, now 26, was playing ....' may also become suitable.
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